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When I hear this in my head, it sounds like the next three lines should end the verse, like "He wasn't quite rose,/that much can be said/about ol' Ragnor the Red!", and verses should proceed in the same manner as the firstIt should end like it began like you said with a tweak: "He wasn't quite rose,/that much can be said/about Rangor the Red/ From ol' Roirkstead!"
Feels like a little too much to me, I kind of prefer it the way it is.
Sorry about the delay on the final fixes, been doing ALOT lately.